ORCACommander
Sep 29 2007, 02:04 PM
The Coming of the Storm
A storm is coming in the night
You can hear it rumbling in the air
The iron weights fall from the sky
They can’t be out run
A pillar of fire forms to my right
As the minis scream over head
Their red glare lights up the dead
The sky lights up in the distance
As the false sun arises to the west
The shockwave silences the night
Then the black snow falls
All through the fight
You awake at the morning light
And there is nothing left in sight
tell me what you think and see if you can spot the comparisons
daTSchikinhed
Oct 1 2007, 05:42 AM
Hmm... Who got nuked?
ORCACommander
Oct 1 2007, 06:44 PM
anyone you want
how ever I was thinking a soviet versus NATO war
Team Black
Oct 1 2007, 08:13 PM
Well, at that time it was Warsaw Pact vs. NATO
daTSchikinhed
Oct 4 2007, 03:11 AM
Methinks Enola Gay assraping japan.
Slender Mang
Oct 4 2007, 07:55 PM
QUOTE (daTSchikinhed @ Oct 3 2007, 11:11 PM)
Methinks Enola Gay assraping japan.
Dont you think thats a bit....Racist
KingByng
Oct 4 2007, 10:00 PM
Japanese isn't a race, it's a nationality
I was going to say the Enola Gay nuking Hiroshima or Nagasaki, but those happened during daylight so...
daTSchikinhed
Oct 5 2007, 06:35 AM
The nightime bombing runs on Tokyo/London/Berlin/Paris in WWII?
I dunno, I"m just pumping crap out now.
Slender Mang
Oct 5 2007, 12:17 PM
QUOTE (BlackieChan @ Oct 4 2007, 06:00 PM)
Japanese isn't a race, it's a nationality
I was going to say the Enola Gay nuking Hiroshima or Nagasaki, but those happened during daylight so...
O well you get the point
Nod Strike
Oct 5 2007, 12:22 PM
Aye.. Me thinks this be racism. Yaarrgg.
ORCACommander
Oct 5 2007, 06:50 PM
there is no racism in the conceit btw. many of you have been very close on the main comparison and I did mention a nuke in there.
ORCACommander
Apr 6 2008, 02:14 AM
why was this never moved to creative writing? and this is still open for comments
Corsair
Apr 6 2008, 02:22 AM
This is my first time seeing this
ORCACommander
Jan 23 2009, 02:26 AM
still not in creative writing
Team Black
Jan 23 2009, 04:31 AM
QUOTE
This is my first time seeing this
I thought so for myself too, until I saw that I already posted
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