Roleplay under construction, (merged with the Ninty topic) Options

[Team Black]

hey uh, where did the roleplay go?

Just like roleplay MKI, there's become a lot of chaos and disorientation in the roleplay.
It was bound to happen, I just want to put it back on track before it gets too far.
I've set it under 'hidden', since I can't edit posts while the topic is closed. So it's really still there, even though you can't see it (Corsair, you can still see it right?)

I'm doing some hardcore editing on it, on spelling & grammar, removing the ion storm, making the characters a little more believable & less overpowered, and rewording some sections to make more sense to the reader.
TBA some entries were so grammatically bad that I didn't even take the time to read them at first. That's a big NO for us as writers: what's the point of spending the time writing, if all our readers are scared away by run ons and, bad speling, and, too many comas, and cant none even, now wat the frik the stories abut.

I know not everyone has English as a first language, but the rule holds true if you know you're going to bomb the story, please don't write.
Reading it can be just as entertaining

I know a lot of people are putting a lot of time and effort into this RP - if no one reads our roleplay because it's filled with bad writing and a boring story, then all that work has gone to waste. I'm doing what I can to edit out the garbage, so that none of the good work goes to waste

[Team Black]

They'd really need a good explanation though for why GDI has an enlisted mutant (you can pretty much tell in the TS/FS FMVs that GDI wouldn't have mutants in their ranks.), and further, a mutant that is trusted to pilot one of their newest mechs in combat..

[Lightstorm]

TB she's not visibly a mutant, from looking at her she looks normal, and if her fictional history that she was raised by the scientists is to be believed any oddities about her could be explained easily by that.

Ninty part of my idea is that Shaw doesn't know anything about her, Snazicoff or any of that, her soldiers wouldn't help her capture, her orders will to remove GDI from the area at all costs, perhaps they get a call from Snazicoff and have an APC go to get them but they find GDI soldiers, shoot them both of them, Krissy is knocked out and wounded, Snazicoff is killed.

[Nintyuk]

TB she's not visibly a mutant, from looking at her she looks normal, and if her fictional history that she was raised by the scientists is to be believed any oddities about her could be explained easily by that.

Ninty part of my idea is that Shaw doesn't know anything about her, Snazicoff or any of that, her soldiers wouldn't help her capture, her orders will to remove GDI from the area at all costs, perhaps they get a call from Snazicoff and have an APC go to get them but they find GDI soldiers, shoot them both of them, Krissy is knocked out and wounded, Snazicoff is killed.

Sure that’s why I didn't start writing it so it could be changed to fit in more maybe it could be Professor J or some thing but my plan is that she becomes a Nod solider (seeming there is a lacking in Nod characters) even if its just temporary that’s why I left a little bit of her old self there.

Also the only reason I made her a tiberium mutant was so Team Black was happy that she fitted in to Command and Conquer more. But now i've decided almost to change my characters history so it sounds better and is more logical because the old one was a bit of a stretch. This new history makes more sense and could be fitting in the Command and Conquer story line because the last nod fire storm FMV contained clones/people wired to Cabal/experiments so Krissy is a possible previous/future member of that crowd.

I don't (apart from the grammar rule) think I actually broke any of the first posts rules so I didn't know what the problem was to start off with but I am working to simplify my characters transition.

This post has been edited by Nintyuk: Oct 4 2007, 07:32 PM