Roleplay under construction, (merged with the Ninty topic) Options

[Team Black]

hey uh, where did the roleplay go?

Just like roleplay MKI, there's become a lot of chaos and disorientation in the roleplay.
It was bound to happen, I just want to put it back on track before it gets too far.
I've set it under 'hidden', since I can't edit posts while the topic is closed. So it's really still there, even though you can't see it (Corsair, you can still see it right?)

I'm doing some hardcore editing on it, on spelling & grammar, removing the ion storm, making the characters a little more believable & less overpowered, and rewording some sections to make more sense to the reader.
TBA some entries were so grammatically bad that I didn't even take the time to read them at first. That's a big NO for us as writers: what's the point of spending the time writing, if all our readers are scared away by run ons and, bad speling, and, too many comas, and cant none even, now wat the frik the stories abut.

I know not everyone has English as a first language, but the rule holds true if you know you're going to bomb the story, please don't write.
Reading it can be just as entertaining

I know a lot of people are putting a lot of time and effort into this RP - if no one reads our roleplay because it's filled with bad writing and a boring story, then all that work has gone to waste. I'm doing what I can to edit out the garbage, so that none of the good work goes to waste

[Nintyuk]

Having Krissy magically find documents that reveals her past is poor writing. You have to thing of a more believable way that she can discover her past-
And make it subtle, piece by piece. Don't rush it or it'll sound like, "I was experimented on as a child an never figured out where I'm from. I'm going to run away! wait, here's a random paper. I guess it was a Nod scientist. OK, life goes on"
Also, having a character think the plot out to themself is not a good way to get it across to the reader.
It might be good in comic books, but in stories it's a bad thing to do. Try to avoid this in the future
-Team Black

I was trying to link up with corsair's papers from the damaged helicopter, there not magically found she was wondering about for ages taking the lost papers from the trees and looking at them and it seems logical that there might be some thing on the lab were she was discovered especially if its the main archive. But I did, as you said, want to reveal it bit by bit but there were a few people confused with what was happening with my character so I decided to sort some thing out so I could explain what was happening
And get my character back in to the story ASAP because no one else would of tried. Also she wasn’t experimented on as a child. she never was a child of any description she was grown in a tube until she was a young adult sized creature, then linked up to cabal so she could be quickly given the learning that she would of missed as a child. Also she thought she was experimented on when she was working with GDI as a titan poilet and the captured when on a mission to protect some scientists but that was all fake apart from the mission and the lab they were taken to.

I wanted to have my character discover her self so her hidden strengths could be revealed and her new character layout could come into affect. But we could have it that she finds out the details from Nod when she’s re-captured. Lights was supposed to capture Krissy and take her to meet with Shaw and then now have it explained to her. After that she would hooked back up to cabal on one of the ships so she can be given the final training and turned in to a heartless killer but because of GDI’s implanted memories she sill has some of her good side which will eventually turn her back against Nod